Wednesday, March 4, 2009

Our system

Rhming for the first time on blogger. Its sort of something scattered. But the main idea can be easily understood if one tries to ... :) .... Actually the main idea for writing this whole thing was taken from the italic lines in the rhyme which i stole from here . :P

So here goes the whole thing .....

Our system

Whats right about our whole system?

The thing that I don’t want to be is a mocker...

Legs once broken, never treated by anyone

How can we make it run? which is not even a walker!

 

Take our political system, like a deer

Always followed, always killed by a cougar

Then someone slips in with “nazriya e zaroorat”

Sharam nahi guzri inn ko choo ker

 

Then there is a continuous movement of politicians

One day they are in power, the other day they are in locker

That’s all hats off to their characters for the activity of being in and out

Its like routine of a coolie who loads in and then unloaded like a docker

 

Then there is our judicial system, nothing right about it

People are judging who can easily end up being a hawker

If you point anything, they’ll say “are you insane?”

Shut your mouth! We don’t tolerate such a talker

 

Being part of it

Anybody would die of shame, sharminda

Hokar

But oh no, not one man

Abdul-Hameed-Dogar

 

o' o' o' stop stop, he is not a bad man

kyoun mein peeche parh gya hath dho ker

Is he doing anything wrong

has he been losing in the game of poker?

 

He doesn't deserve being mentioned anywhere

as he is a mere system's joker

There are numerous goons above him

who can easily remove him with a thoker

 

these people are working on a common agenda

to make Pakistani qaum a choker

that’s why they even die like same

one die with a bullet, and other in the crash of a Fokker

 

I listen to their speeches no more

Coz I don’t like them saying “janab hum khadim, hum noker”

And there are more moral activities then this one

like watching the dance of Urmila Matondkar :p


Zohaib your ryhming is directing nowhere

So fear God and bus ker .... :P


Copyrights:  Will think over it! :P

5 comments:

Uni said...

eh eh eh eh :D

Brilliant..

Keep it up!

Zohaib Aslam said...

Thanks ....

For reading as well as letting your verse be the source of this rhyme...

Anonymous said...

Awesome!! Really brilliant!!
I loved it!!!
U seriously can use poetry more effectively to criticize!! ;)

Zohaib Aslam said...

Thanks salman for the appreciation ... hopefully I do come up with some nice ideas and write something called constructive criticism ....
Thanks again ....

Umer Latif said...

Yeah, I liked that. I already told you you're good at rapping. Continue it.